In the meantime, enjoy the responses I have made to other prompts.

Thursday, December 7, 2017

https://susannahill.com/2017/12/07/ho-ho-ho-the-7th-annual-holiday-contest-is-here/

To Give is to Receive

On Christmas Eve ten-year old Samantha stood at the door of the homeless shelter while her mother dropped off the box of toys Samantha used to own. Samantha held tight to Barkus, her floppy-eared, brown stuffed dog.

As she waited, a young boy came up to Samantha. The boy looked longingly at Barkus. Samantha held the puppy even tighter as she examined the child. His mussed blonde hair and mismatched clothes caused her to loosen the grip on Barkus. The boy reached for the dog. Samantha hesitated, and then his eyes widened as she handed him her cherished toy. He grabbed Barkus with one arm and wrapped the other one around Samantha. She hugged the little boy in return. He let go of her, smiled at her with the biggest smile she’d ever seen, and then ran off – with Barkus – across the room.

Unknown to Samantha, her mom had been watching. She wiped a tear from Samantha’s cheek, took Samantha’s hand and squeezed it as they left the shelter, telling her, “I’m so proud of you.”

That night Samantha struggled to go to sleep without Barkus until she remembered the feel of the boy’s hug and the smile on his face.


The next morning, Christmas day, Samantha woke up to a strange sound. She thought she heard barking. She threw off her covers, and ran down the stairs. There at the foot of the stairs was a real, floppy-eared brown puppy. Samantha scooped up the puppy and cried, “It’s Barkus!”







This is an entry for Susanna Hill's Holiday contest. It has to be for children, about a surprise and limited to 250 words - excluding the title. I have used exactly 250 words.

32 comments:

  1. This is so sweet and uplifting. It's a tale that will mean something to all children everywhere. Well done!

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    1. Thank you Jill! (I wrote this a while ago, but didn't post it as a reply, so I am not sure if you ever saw it!!)

      Thanks again!!

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  2. Wonderful lesson for us all and it ends well too :)
    best of luck to you, Colleen.

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    1. Thanks Vicki! Good luck to you as well! Can you give me a link to your entry if you have one??

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    2. My post is Lost and Found
      https://willowwritesweb.wordpress.com/

      Thanks for asking and for reading :)

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  3. Yes this is a good story, especially if i get emotional. Well done.

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    1. It sounded good when I first wrote it. Lol. All the stories are well told. Thank you for stopping by and checking out mine.

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  4. This is a true Christmas story. How very thoughtful and sweet.

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  5. Heartwarming. I like the surprise ending. Good luck in the contest.

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    1. Thank you Angela! Good luck to you if you entered. And if you did, can you please provide a link to your story?

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  6. What a lovely story! Thank you for creating it. Good luck!

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    1. Thank you for reading it and for your kind comments!

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  7. I LOVE this! What a terrific twist.

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    1. Thank you Jean! If you entered, please give me your link!

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  8. A lovely story that really captures the spirit of Christmas. I love it!

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    1. Thank you Carol Ann. I would love to read your entry if you could give me your link.

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  9. So sweet! I know a lot of dog crazy kids who would love it!

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    1. Thanks Rebekah! Can you please send me the link to your entry?

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  10. Very sweet, Colleen! And a perfect surprise. Love that Barkus is already living up to his name. :)

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  11. Thanks Delfina! Please leave your link so I can read your entry!

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  12. Aww, thanks for your interest, Colleen! Here's the link to mine: http://www.delfinasalimbene.com/single-post/2017/12/02/Holiday-Contest-for-Childrens-Writers

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  13. A tender holiday story. Barkus is such a cute name, and finally he can live up to it when it belongs to a real dog. A sweet Christmas surprise.

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    1. My middle daughter, now 25, still has her Barkus. Thanks for stopping by! I would love to read your entry if you could leave the link!

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  14. Barkus is a great name for a puppy, plush or real. Great story. Good luck!

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    1. Thanks Gregory! Do you have a link for your entry?

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  16. Tried to comment from the wrong account last night. LOVELY story. It's always hard to give up our prized things. I'm glad Samantha is rewarded at the end.

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    1. Thanks for stopping by Mishka! I am glad you liked the story. Please stop back in and give me a link to your story too!!

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  17. Aw! What a lovely story about the true meaning of Christmas, Colleen. So selfless of Samantha, and her kindness was rewarded. Thank you for this sweet story!

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    1. Thanks for stopping by to read it Susanna and thank you for all of your hard work! It seems the Halloween contest just ended!

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